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A waste
keeping me here
unwanted, clinging to pretenses of expectancy

Why not just leave
waiting has hurt us
not to mention
what shall happen at the end of all this

All eyes on me
their fierce gazes pushing me farther into the floor
I need to stand taller
chin up, chest out

Confidence keeps slipping off my shoulders
like a hand-me-down jacket
it will never fit right

And the one who could lift me up
has not found anything worth looking at in me
warm chocolate eyes focused on more important things

A feeling of insignificance settles over me
ripping my jacket to shreds
falling to the floor in a pile of defeat
I feel like total shit right now, don't judge.
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:iconmichel-le-fou:
OK, what impressed me immediately was your use of tercets, albeit unrhymed. That is the choice of the poet always. The content-and I aver that it matters more than form-is interesting, perhaps riveting. On the surface, on both counts, it displays originality and imagination, which I herald in literature. The tercet struck me immediately, and it should do with every reader; that compels reading further.
The following stanza are quatrains, which are standard form in poetry too. The old poets including Persians like Kayam, wrote them ably.used Every detail was entertaining despite the solemnity of the subject. Keep writing and submitting.

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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a lovely exploration of feeling less-than-confident, but I hope you're feeling better about things now!
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LyingViaPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you and I kind of am now actually :)
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome and I'm glad! :)
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tiajones Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i feel that your entire poem could be condensed to these lines-

"Confidence keeps slipping off my shoulders
like a hand-me-down jacket
it will never fit right

And the one who could lift me up
has not found anything worth looking at in me
warm chocolate eyes focused on more important things"

and i think that's absolutely lovely,
because we've all been there,
we all know, but we don't know how to speak it.
you did. <3
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LyingViaPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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tiajones Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
of course. (:
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