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Unsure and stuttering
you ask me
ask for everything
ask for too much

I refuse to take your pleas
to look at those desperate eyes
overflowing with pent up emotion

Leave me be
watch your reflection bounce back at you from cold glass
I have no time left to give
that's what you want, isn't it?

My time
more time
time, time, time

The sand in my hollow body has just about run out
leaving me empty
with false hopes that I might be turned over
giving me a few more hours on the clock

I used to be a work of art
now only cracked glass
wishing less life was wasted clinging to falling sand

I can give you other chances
if you help me

Fill my cracks with sincerity
repaint my chipped edges with bright smiles
I have yet to be fixed but I know it's possible

Mend me
only then can I give you the time you seek
I wrote this then accidentally left the submit page so everything was deleted! I tried to rewrite it but I think a few words are missing so if this doesn't sound right or flow right, that's why. I've done that before to and it's so frustrating!

Also I thought this picture fitted kinda well -> [link]
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I like this one. The title makes a good connection with the concept of fading beauty and reminds me of Sylvia Plath. It sounds like the woman is so self conscious and unsure of herself that she will not commit emotionally.

It certainly seems to give the image of a broken bird scenario. The woman has many issues and is asking for someone to help. It is written like the woman is a statue- a Galatea. The statue has been damaged by emotional trauma and needs to be repaired through love and affection.

A very enjoyable piece of work. I hope you write more in the future.
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1LunaAzure1 Featured By Owner May 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beauty is what this piece of poetry is :)  
Thank you for writing it :) 
PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Student General Artist
I really like it :D I also love your username
LyingViaPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
Missdelayingit Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome!!! Yay, I love this one! :)
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